I spent some time combing through the different passages to fix past tense sentences into present tense, along with some tighter writing here and there. So much of it had been written while I was sleep deprived and running on fumes. That's probably all the cleaning I'll do for this version of it. From here on, I'm just gonna work at it, clean up the story, do some heavy editing, and finally move the whole thing to Ren'py and make a dang visual novel!